Confusing description and a lack of context bog down an action-packed opening.
A lack of nuance, attachment, and tension make this intro more of a whimper than a roar.
How to use the strengths of a distant perspective to make your story exciting.
What’s this? Ariel has returned from the wilderness of freelance editing to grace our podcast yet again.
Ten tips and tricks for a word rep quick fix.
How to get your character's voice to really pop.
How lots of rambling and an uncertain focus turned this sci-fi opening into a slog.
The protagonist appeared in the doorway, dressed in a magnificent golden helm and with cerulean eyes shining fiercely.
How to know where your story should be narrated from—and what to know about the option you pick.
How to get fancy with mystery and metaphor—and when you're overdoing it.
Despite a confusing intro and unclear focus, this sci-fi story pulls through on its novelty.
How to sharpen up your word craft no matter what tale you're telling.
How to get your readers into your protagonist's shoes without bogging them down with details.
Too much telling and a lack of emotion hinder what could have been a tense opening.
Ariel, Chris, and Oren describe the difference between showing elaborate spectacle and simply telling what happens.
A lack of focus and a tell-over-show mindset hamstring this fantasy story's opening.
Why you should kick this instinctual writing habit—and what you should replace it with.
A lack of context and a meandering focus run a good idea into the ground.