Author Peter Watts has an engaging voice and a reckless disregard for accuracy.
The worst story ever written... or is it?
Winter World's opening establishes tension but lacks novelty, attachment, or satisfaction.
Confusing info dumps and lack of plot focus make this a disorienting opening.
Give your character agency and consistency... or die.
Monsters have nothing on the horrors of confusing wordcraft and muddled description.
A smarmy protagonist and an inconsistent tone undercuts Maximum Ride's hopes for a tense opening.
You asked me to critique The Name of the Wind by Patrick Rothfuss, so here we are.
Master perspective before it masters you.
We've written lessons for numerous works, but never for this particular post.
Renshaw's wordcraft is clumsy, but at least it isn't boring.
Last year, Handbook for Mortals by Lani Sarem cheated its way to the top of the New York Times YA bestseller list.
Confusing description and a lack of context bog down an action-packed opening.
A lack of nuance, attachment, and tension make this intro more of a whimper than a roar.
A jerk main character and slow, run-on paragraphs drag this early sci-fi tale to a crawl.
How lots of rambling and an uncertain focus turned this sci-fi opening into a slog.
The world-famous vampiric romance and its kinky fanfic cousin square off.
This unorganized opening leaves readers dozing—except for the painful jolts of sexism.
Lovecraft's early horror story shows his way with words—and his less desirable narrative tropes.
A confusing and meandering throughline leaves this short story stuck. (Yes, in the doorway.)