When we want to say something but don’t want to stand behind it, out comes the qualifier.
That sweater just makes you look a little fat.
It doesn’t change what you’re saying, but it adds a wishy-washy, insecure flavor. No one likes the taste of wishy-washy; give it up.
Granted, you’ll need them occasionally.
Most women are between the ages of 20 and 60.
But beware these culprits:
- a bit
- a little
- kind of
When our words aren’t strong enough but we’re too lazy to come up with better ones, we’ll use a bland modifier to make up the difference.
I really like your painting; it’s very pretty.
Did I say “make up the difference”? I meant “add clutter.” Blandifiers make sentences dull and pedestrian. If you need more punch in your prose, dump the original word and use a stronger replacement.
I love your painting; it’s gorgeous.
It will make your writing tighter and more powerful.
However, when wielded with full awareness of their limitations, blandifiers can add personality and emotion:
Don’t call me that. Ever.
Search out these evil-doers:
We use these several words to signal when an action is sudden or unexpected. The problem is that readers can’t be told when an action is sudden; they have to feel it themselves. This is useless:
Maria sat next to David. He suddenly punched her in the gut.
Want an action to feel abrupt? Congratulations, all you have to do is nothing.
Maria sat next to David. She punched him in the gut.
The context is doing all the work. The first sentence makes the reader expect affectionate interaction, not a punch. Urgency signals are only useful when readers would believe the action was gradual:
David drank and joked with us for three hours, then abruptly left.
Leaving a social gathering involves waving and goodbyes. Here, “abruptly” tells readers he skipped the social niceties.
Stallers appear when we want to narrate action, yet… don’t want action? So we stall for time by pushing the action behind a pile of clutter.
If you start to feel dizzy, call for help.
When it comes to action, just do it; don’t try to begin to do it. You’ll feel better when it’s over with.
Unless the distinction matters. In that case, stall as you need to:
She tried to tame the dragon, but it flew away.
Look out for these perpetrators:
- able to
- supposed to
- seem to
- try to
- best to
- decide to
- start to
- begin to
- have to
- need to
- going to
What are these phrases trying to achieve while they sit around doing nothing? Your guess is as good as mine.
It is a fact that snakes have scales.
Loiterers don’t deserve the space they’re getting, except on rare occasions:
Our hero may be gone, but there is still hope.
Keep an eye out for these miscreants:
- there are/is
- I think/know
- you can/should
- the fact that
- type of
- is that it
Many of us use clutter words by habit, and it can be a hard habit to break. But if you regularly check your work and correct it, you’ll get there.
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